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Magickcello
September 23rd,2002, 06:05 AM
(A/N: I posted this because no one else liked my other story! I hope this one is better....*makes a pathetic face* all who R&R get cookies!)

The board creaked and moaned. The floor slanted as the chandeliers smashed to the ground, breaking into a million glittering pieces.

Plates toppled from the shelves and tables had started to slide down the floor. It was like walking up onto the ceiling. Water from the basin splashed out onto the floor but there was no reason to wipe it up because soon, the whole floor would be under water. And I would be with it.

I struggled frantically against my bonds, I was tied to the beam on the lower deck of the ship. Suddenly with a giant CRACK the beam broke and I flew across the slanted floor. I felt the wind knocked out of my stomach as I hit the wall with a thump. Freezing water seeped through the door and gushed up to my kness and soaked my dress, making it stick to my ankles.

I tried crawling up the floor to the door, but the water made me slip and slide. I knew I wasnt going to make it in time. I struggled up the floor, panic easing its way into the bottom of my stomach. I climbed up to the door. It was locked of course. Without thinking, I dived my hand into the swirling glass designs. Pain shot up my arm and shocked my brain. Four fresh cuts scrawled acroos my knuckles. I blinked back tears and bit my lip.

Somehow, my other hand found the outside of the door, unlocked it and I was out. Of the room at least. Soon the Airwenian would be nothing but a dream, hidden deep underneith the ocean.

I swung through the empty corridor. The freezing water was rushing in now, seeping across the hall. I was now waist deep in water and my dress was so heavy with water it was hard to move.

When I saw the boards pressing with water, I knew they were going to break but I didnt have time to think. I closed my eyes.
"Just breath...." I tried to calm myself. Walls smashed open and a tyrade of water pulled me into a swirling undertow. It carried me swiftly to the stairs and smashed my face into the wall. My temple ached and my head was water logged.

I stopped moving.

I stopped thinking.

I was going to die anyway. So I stopped fighting, and let the water take me.

I let my thoughts drift to Legolas...I had never told him...what I should have.......

Everything went black.

A/N: I have no idea where this is all going and I hope you like it!

Ranger
September 23rd,2002, 06:45 PM
This is great far lots of descriptions and I like that; I can almost imagine this happening in my mind*

Goldilocks
September 23rd,2002, 11:43 PM
Great start! What happens to me next? :grin:

Magickcello
September 24th,2002, 12:55 AM
Thanks guys! *hands a cookie to ranger and goldilocks*
Bwahhaahahahah!! *mimicks singsong voice* I'll never tell......actually, I have no idea what will happen next either but I will probably be posting more later tonight anyway!

Tar-Ancalimë
September 24th,2002, 01:02 AM
do I get one too? I read it!

Well... what now? You're writing is slightly incoherent but that's not an insult!!! I promise :grin:
overall I enjoyed it.

Dawnnamira Nerwen
October 3rd,2002, 08:37 PM
I've R&R do I get cookies too? I like both of your stories!

Pil
October 3rd,2002, 09:54 PM
That was a very good piece of writing. The description is vivid and it instantly includes the reader...is it a bit of a titanic moment? :huh:

Nice one magickcello! :read: :thumbs: I look forward to seeing what happens... :)