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WinterSoul
June 21st,2002, 11:45 PM
Deep in the dark halls
‘Neath the mountains old
Hidden with his birthday gem
From the light so well
Amid the grimy lake
Wicked Gollum dwelt

On his boat he was one day
Feasting on some prey
When Bilbo Baggins came his way
On that very day

Riddles in the dark began
Shaping up a plan
To gobble down our hobbit champ

In that ancient game
Luck had saved the him twice
His turn it was again
But with that thing by his side
Nothing came to mind

Another question there must be
Oh it’s hard to win the game
While Gollum sits anxiously
Flashing with his eyes

Poking our friend he did
Scattered thus his wits
Chance again came to thee
Out of the dark abyss

Was his question fair or not
That nobody could tell
However by it’s help and some lost ring
He got out of that hell

Fatty
June 22nd,2002, 12:04 AM
I like this poem a lot WinterSoul, tickles the fancy. Very good.

WinterSoul
June 22nd,2002, 12:22 AM
Thank you Fatty. I tried to emphasize more on the rhyming but after hours of work i realized that if i do that i will drift away from the concept. So i put up with it the way it is.
Glad you like it.

Illuvatar
June 22nd,2002, 12:25 AM
Yes yes.....

Very well done!!

HUZAH!! To the new poet in the house!!entdraught entdraught entdraught entdraught

WinterSoul
June 23rd,2002, 02:16 AM
my smileys are holding up their glasses and drinking up thier beer with your smileys

entdraught entdraught

:beer: entdraught :beer: entdraught

entdraught :beer: entdraught

seems like a beer gang is forming !

:grin:

Beregond
June 24th,2002, 05:03 PM
Great job. I like the last stanza a lot.
entdraught entdraught
notworthy entdraught notworthy
entdraught entdraught

WinterSoul
June 25th,2002, 12:18 AM
let's have a slurp then

:beer: :beer: :beer: lol

PrinceImrahil
June 26th,2002, 11:48 PM
Wow thats really good!

Gil-Galad
June 28th,2002, 12:08 AM
Agreed.