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AlienFX007
June 24th,2002, 04:37 PM
I originally posted this in another forum, but everyone there liked it so much I thought 'heck, why not post it here, too'.


The Piteous Creature, Gollum

You slimy, slinking, sneaking beast,
Creeping, crawling down the walls,
Hoping for some hobbit feast,
Desperate to return the calls
Of the thing.

That little, lifeless, loveless vex,
Once a weight upon your hand,
Mocks you, locks you, tries to hex
You, leads you to a darker land.
Curse the ring!

No!
Yesses!
No! No!
Yesss!

Bless it, kiss it and caress it;
Curse it; kill us; let us rest
A single second just to sit
In blissful silence…The test
Of the thing!

Twisted, troubled, wretched brute,
Sheer will won’t win ‘gainst Sauron!
Though a hobbit at the roots,
A monster now; your freedom’s gone
To the ring.

Beregond
June 24th,2002, 05:00 PM
Wow. Awesome. I like the "of the thing" and the "curse the rings"s.
When did you write this?:thumbs:

Illuvatar
June 24th,2002, 05:22 PM
Thanks ever so much for sharing!!:thumbs:

AlienFX007
June 24th,2002, 06:01 PM
Well, I wrote this a few months ago for a LoTR contest in another forum. The prize was the sword, Sting, and being a huge hobbit fan, I really wanted to win, but I didn't. But everyone still liked the poem :)

A! Elbereth
June 24th,2002, 07:22 PM
I love your poem! you should have won!

WinterSoul
June 25th,2002, 12:07 AM
Good work :thumbs:
and a good subject too
i love writing about Gollum

PrinceImrahil
June 26th,2002, 11:52 PM
This is really good. All these poems are starting to inspire me maybe you will all hear from me not long from now.

Gil-Galad
June 28th,2002, 12:04 AM
That would be splendid.

Good show!

AlienFX007
June 28th,2002, 04:01 PM
Thanks so much for all your comments! :D