The Fellowship

[Gil-Galad]

Well, its in preliminary sages. I made it unrhyming (unframiliar teritory for me) so that it would capture the spirit better. I want comments and critism. I will edit it accordenly (if i like it:p ). Please, read it all. Thank you.

A wizard who despratley stood against the dark
To protect the people of the land
He gave up almost everything to help acheive a quest
And then was allowed to rest
Gandalf

A man who drew his sword to defy the dark
Who claimed what was rightfully his
In the process he often had to hope when there seemed none left
But in the end was granted happiness
Aragorn

His doubts about the quest were fatal
And in the end he learned his error
He died protecting those the world needed
And was granted eternal rest.
Boromir

An archer who went with them
Who braved the perils of the dead
And briged a gap between races
And found his destiny in the sea
Legolas

A stocky warrior
Who found true buety
And helped the quest with his axe
And left his home in the end
Gimli

Once he laughed with mirth
Then he saw the peril in middle earth
He drew forth his blade to protect the land
In his enemy it found its mark
Merry

A hobbit who caused much trouble
And took a while to learn
But once he did he stood steadfastly
And was great help
Pippin

One who would sacrifice anything for his master
Who stood fast throught many horrors
One who saved the quest more than once
One who was great among hobbits
Sam

This one took the hardest road
One of darkness, evil and despair
Yet he held on
And saved the world
Frodo

Together they stood against the dark
Helping each their seprate ways
And they vanquished it
And will be remembered as
The Fellowship of the Ring

[WinterSoul]

Very well Gil.
just what is that word "stppd". you seem to have eaten a letter or two. Stopped of stepped maybe?
I like the concept of the poem very much. Introducing all the fellowship in such a way is a very good and effective idea. Really enjoyable.
As far as comments. I don't have any so far.

[Gil-Galad]

Okay, i fixed it. could i get a straighter answer. should i stick to rhyming, is it good, do you like it. But probaly most inportant, am i to hight strung;)

[WinterSoul]

yes it is good.
This is poetry.
Well i can't advise you how to write wheter using rhymes or not. This is a different more expressive and detailed approach than the rhyming structure. Personally i like it. You alone have to make the choice how to write, for those are your creations.
Anyway, rhyming alone, soon becomes boring if all your works are constructed like that - you can use both ways or even combine. That's the piece of asvice i'll give you. Ans that's the way i write.
hope it helps in some sort of way.

[Gil-Galad]

Thank you. a rhyming one came to my head latley and i will post it but after that i will try my hand at some more un rhyming, i like them.

[A! Elbereth]

Gil-Galad... no matter how hard I try I will never be able to write as good as you. I thought mine were good but once I saw yours i could tell i needed a huge improvment! And you think of these so fast it seems.. I spend about a half an hour on a poem to get more emotional words... anyway.. Its a wonderful Poem and I like the way you portrayed Frodo but my favorite stanza has to be Legolas'. I'm surprised I liked that one the most. You had to have done a good job to make me like Legolas' the best lol

[WinterSoul]

It's always like that A! ELBERETH you never are satisfied wit your work when you see what other people write.
This happens to me too. Once i see yours and Gil's poems i start not to like mine :)

[Gil-Galad]

Happens to me when i see yours. Now i gatta go write another one!