Don't read it if you don't like elves at HD

[Elbereth]

um... I know everyone hated it and all and I know this isn't very good but it kept bothering me until I wrote it. Please be nice:blush:

Elven Archers to Helms Deep
Swords will clash and drums will beat
Stand with men against the Eye
Many here are doomed to die
Warriors so grim and brave
Leave imortality for the grave

Bow in hand upon the wall
You stand in line, so proud and tall
Arrows fly, the great bows sing
Forsaking land of Ever Spring
Leader dead and battle won
Mend alliance dead too long.

ugh - looks worse than ever in type - never mind. Just ignore the wanderings of a deluded poet!

[Wilwarin]

I liked the Elves at Helm's Deep! And I liked your poem too! It wasn't bad at all. A deluted poet you are not!

[Tar-Ancalimë]

stop it with the self bashing lol... this is a good poem, even if you don't happen to like elves at hd :)

far from bad, i thought it was good. i enjoyed reading it a lot.... and do you know my opinion of elves at helms deep? lol

[Nessa the Dancer]

Yes, I enjoyed your poem Elbereth, it is good, and far from wanderings :)

[Elbereth]

Hey thanks everyone - I guess I'm just shy cos I never posted any poems or fics before:blush:
But your comments certainly brightened up my day :grin:

Personally I quite liked elves at Helms Deep but I know a lot of people who didn't

[Wilwarin]

Well, I do. I think it should have been that way in the books........but I can see this leading the topic away! I'll be quiet now.

[Daughter of Gondor]

My fac line was "Leave imortality for the grave"

really powerful.

[Elbereth]

Thanks - I was trying to write a poem for Haldir but he is being difficult and won't let me see what he is thinking!

[Elbereth]

Haldir finally agreed to some kind of poem but it isn't anything like the last one - oh well, he's difficult and now it's written I think I know why he objected! He says it is impossible to think in rhyming couplets when someone plants an axe in your spine but I'll have to take his word for that!;) (yes I do think of the people poems are based on just the same as if they were in a story):blush:
Anyway - here goes

It is not me you want, Death
For I am elven-born
Immortality, my birthright
Death, I was not born to die.
I have decades left
To walk among the trees
To carry bow and blade
To see return of peace.
Death, there is a girl for me
She waits in Lorien
With a smile
And hair like honey.
Death, will you let her weep?
I should not feel pain
I should see the victory.
You have taken so many
Why come for me?
Why make elf as weak as man?
To fall
To fall
Let me walk once more on Earth
Let me feel the wind and sun
Let me see Lothlorien
And girls
With hair like honey.
Let me live a little longer
Let me see the dawn.

Anyone else got any Haldir poems? I haven't seen many around.

[Wilwarin]

Hey, I like that! It really captures Haldir's thoughts. I can see that he is thinking that as he is dying in the movie. Really nice. You may have read my poem "Of Elves and Death". This one explains the idea of Elves and death better than mine I think. Good job!

[Elbereth]

Thanks Wilwarin - a comment like that from someone who writes like you do is a real compliment (Have just read 'Of Elves and Death' and loved it):blush:

[Elbereth]

uh, yet another HD poem (caused by seeing TTT again!)
POV of girl with 'hair like honey'

Hair is cut
Long locks shorn
Clothes are rent
Grey dress torn
Body on the battlefield
Brave new dawn
Lover in the Goldenwood
Grey hopeless morn
Head bowed in Lorien
Bleeding heart torn
Seeing now the last embrace
Last attempt to warn
Tell me of his passing
In the arms of Aragorn
Left a love in Lorien
Lost, alone, forlorn.

not terribly cheerful, tearing dress and cutting hair were ideas given by a discussion in a theology lesson. All comments welcome, even criticisms though only if they're constructive! Please be kind :blush: