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Elfdaughter
March 2nd,2003, 09:21 PM
I'll try and post at least a chapter up each day.

In the Dragon’s sight

Chapter One
First Sight

It was silent. The reeds swayed gently in the soft, caressing breeze, and a river flowed beside them, lazy in the evening warmth. Beyond them, lay a forest, shadowed and cool. The silence was broken every now and again by the chattering of the birds in the tall, strong oak trees. A boy; no more than 15 or 16, crawled out of the reeds and lay panting on the ground, tears streaming down his face, and his pitiful sobs sending the birds flying.
He was slender but strong, and his long, soaking, silver hair clung to his back. His eyes were bright blue, and as fierce and as turbulent as a sea in a storm. After a while he stood, his face streaked with mud, and ran deep into the forest. He ran and ran, brambles whipping and tearing his legs, until he could run no farther. He sank to a convulsing heap, on a patch of grass, damp and soothing, his body and mind racked with pain. At length, he fell into a fitful sleep, as he went over the day’s happenings. In the west, beyond the forest, back the way he had come, a red glow began to fade. Baltimir slept, and dreamed of what had happened.
Baltimir was asleep when the first cries came. He woke to see his mother leaning over him, stroking his face. She had not done that since he was a child, and he immediately knew that something was wrong. As soon as she saw that he was awake, she withdrew her hand. Tears were streaming down her face as she told him to leave the village at once, and to take the safest route. He stood up, leaving behind the safety and warmth of the sheepskin blankets, and stared at his mother, questioningly. Her face was calm, but her soft brown eyes belied her sorrow. She gently, and quite calmly, told him that Orcs were coming, and that she just wanted him to be safe whilst the men took care of them.
“Will you come with me?” Baltimir asked her.
“No, my son, I am old and slow, and two attract more easily than one. No, you must go on your own.” she replied. As he started to run, he heard her saying, “Take care, my son, and may Almera and his Great Lords protect you.”
He stretched and stood up. He looked about him, but did not recognise any of the trees or bushes. He felt a rumbling in his stomach, and went in search of food. He went deeper and deeper into the forest until he finally came to a clearing. The sun warmed his face, ferns gently stroked his legs, and the scent of bluebells drifted around him. In the middle of the clearing was an enormous mound, and on top of the mound were two pillars of white stone, and behind them was a great stone table. Suddenly, a brilliant light appeared between the pillars, and bathed Baltimir in a golden glow. He immediately felt refreshed, and his sorrows were wiped from him. The light subdued, and a mighty voice, seemingly touched with gold, said,
“Welcome, Baltimir, Son of Adam. Welcome the Chosen one, blessed by Almera, Tarva, and Alinvil!” At this a great cheer went up, and Baltimir saw that creatures of all shapes and sizes were sitting at the stone table. “Come closer, my son.” The noble voice said, and Baltimir went forward up the hill.
The mighty voice belonged to an even mightier creature. It stood between the pillars, seeming to be both fierce and gentle at the same time. Its feathers were soft and golden, yet its talons, and beak, were hard and sharp. Baltimir would have been afraid, were it not for the gentleness in its eyes. Baltimir had heard of these types of birds, but had never seen one before. He had even doubted their existence. Yet here was a real, live, Phoenix! According to their legends, the Phoenix ruled the supernatural animals of the woods and forests, the Centaurs, Unicorns, talking beasts and so on.
“Come, Baltimir, eat and feast. Then you must rest, for tomorrow is the Great Council, and you are to be there, as it is of you that we speak. And now,” he addressed the creatures gathered before him, “prepare the feast, and show our young guest where he is to sleep. Drink, eat, and make merry!”
“Oh, most magnificent Phoenix, I am most deeply thankful, for I am cold, tired and hungry, although less so for seeing you. But, how did you know my name?” The Phoenix laughed, a deep rich laugh, and replied,
“Do not worry yourself, my son. I know many things, and your name is the least of them. But we should not talk of this here. Such things are best left until tomorrow, and the council, for tonight is a night of feasting and laughing. Come, your place is ready.” The feast was extraordinary. There were so many different animals, yet all seemed to have their fill. The Dwarves, Elves, Wizards, Centaurs, Unicorns, Nymphs and Dryads, Fawns and talking beasts all sat together at the stone table, laughing and joking. Course after course of dishes came, and course by course they disappeared. Hay and oats (for the Unicorns and talking horses) roast chicken, pork, beef, and the most wonderful gravy appeared from thin air, along with strawberries and cream, chocolate and ice cream, and all provided for by the Wizards. Wizards are well known to be able to produce the most delightful food just by magic. (They are, however, terrible cooks if asked to produce something without magic. The saying “Too many cooks spoil the broth” certainly applies to them!)
The feasting, songs and story telling went on well into the night. Baltimir felt his eyes getting heavier and heavier as the moon reached her highest point in the sky, and soon he could not keep awake any longer. Two pairs of gentle, but strong hands lifted him up, and carried him to a tent, where they laid him down on a bed so fine he seemed to be floating on air. It was, in fact, made of soft downy feathers. Warm and contented, Baltimir slept soundly. The next morning, a horn blowing outside his tent woke him. He crept outside, into the gentle warmth of the early morning sun. The tents had been pitched a fair way away from the stone table, to allow the council to go undisturbed, and so Baltimir could see the council gathered around the table, but he could not hear them. He went forward, up towards the slab of rock. As he reached it, he saw the Phoenix, who nodded to him, and pointed to the empty chair beside him.
“Soup and celery! We need a strong warrior for this task! Who knows what dangers he will face? My Lord, we cannot use a young village boy!” A Dwarf was saying. His face was partly hidden by his huge fiery red beard, and a cap covered his head. His mighty war axe lay before him on the stone table, and he gripped it as he spoke. “What say you, Stormrider? Do we use this… farm boy?”
“Connax!” cried the Phoenix. “Stormrider is a Centaur, a prophet, and a stargazer. We shall hear what he has to say, but in good time, and only when he is ready.” Stormrider was a Centaur, human to his waist, with the body of a horse, and all respected him. He had a kind and gentle face, and his hair was white, though not with age, and he held up his hand as he replied,
“The time is ripe. Tarva and Alinvil have met in the halls of high heaven.”
“But we need a hero!” cried Connax
“Why else does your ‘farm boy’ go clad in armour, and girt with sword? The time is ripe.” Stormrider replied. Baltimir felt slightly stiffer than he usually felt, and when he looked down, he saw that he was dressed in silver armour, with a sword around his waist. Connax still did not seem to accept Baltimir. Then there were the introductions. There was Breymar, a young, talking, white Wolf, who sniffed Baltimir and accepted him, Mekilno, a woodland Elf and a good shot with a bow and arrow. He, like Baltimir, was tall and slender, but strong. His hair was long and coloured like the sun, and his eyes were the deepest blue. There was Silver, the Unicorn, and Connax the Dwarf and Stormrider the Centaur.
From the camp came the faint sound of a horn blowing.
“Quick! To the camp!” shouted Breymar, “Someone is attacking!”
“BACK!” cried the Phoenix “Let the prince win his spurs!” To Baltimir he said, “Go to the camp. Protect my people, and earn your place.”

Aragorn's Latest Lay
March 2nd,2003, 10:31 PM
I like this one ED. It has a different feel to the mysticism of the others. It is good-humoured and sounds as though it is going to take your readers on a fun adventure.

Look forward to more of this.

Elfdaughter
March 3rd,2003, 11:22 AM
Thanks, A.L.L!

Chapter Two
Prophecy

Baltimir rushed down the side of the mound, and into the camp, his sword banging against his silver armour. He carried a shield, bearing a silver, roaring lion and golden Phoenix, the emblem of the Phoenix of the forest. Panic had engulfed the camp, and Fawns, Dryads and Nymphs were running this way and that, and in the midst of them, Baltimir saw a huge Wolf. His eyes were flaming red, and his teeth were sharp and yellow. He let out a vicious howl and turned on Baltimir. The enormous Wolf lunged for Baltimir’s throat, snapping its fangs. Before Baltimir could draw his sword, the Wolf jumped on him, its eyes flashing. Baltimir used his shield to knock the Wolf sideways, and he managed to push the Wolf off him. He drew his sword, and span round to face the Wolf, which lunged at him once more. Baltimir thrust his sword forward, just as the creature’s fangs started to close around his neck. The Wolf fell forwards, crushing Baltimir’s sword, and lay still.
A cheer went up from the camp, and Baltimir realised that the Wolf was dead. His neck felt wet, and so he reached up to it to wipe away the liquid. As he drew his hand away, he looked at his fingers and saw blood on them. A Fawn ran from the crowd and wiped it away from Baltimir’s neck, concerned that he had been wounded, and stared at a small scar on Baltimir’s neck.
“Oh!” he gasped, “The prophecy! He is the One!” Baltimir whisked round.
“The One?” he asked. “What do you mean? What prophecy?”
“You don’t know? This scar on your neck- don’t you know what it means?” Baltimir shook his head slowly. “It means that, according to the prophecy, you are the one that will travel to the Ancient Land, and awake the old Wizard, Walír, who lives in a cave under the cliffs of Mount Grimore. But now you must return to the council. Perhaps they will say the same.” As Baltimir hurried off back to the stone table, the Fawn added, under his breath, “Good luck, my prince.”
And so it came to pass that the Great Council met once more at the Stone Table. But Baltimir was confused.
“My Lord, you referred to me as a ‘prince’, and told me to ‘earn my place’. I do not understand.”
“My son, you have yet to learn many things. Were you not told of the prophecy?”
“I…I… well…”
The Phoenix gave an exasperated sigh. “Were you told, Baltimir?”
“Yes, but…”
“But?”
“My Lord, I am no warrior. I will try to find Walír, but I also have heard the legend, or, at least, part of it, and know that only the most worthy of warriors can tread the path into the valley under Mount Grimore and into his caves. I cannot do it, my Lord. I am only a village boy. But, if you send me, I will go.”
“I send you, Baltimir, but I do not send you alone. Stormrider shall be your guide, as he is the best navigator for your journey. But who else shall join the two? Mekilno, for you are fleet of foot, and the best of your kind with a bow. Perhaps your songs will keep the journey easy, or at least help you on your way. Connax, for you are the best wielder of an axe I know. And Silver, whose magic can rival even that of Stormrider. And so we have five.”
“My Lord. I could not have wished for better company. Now we have a better chance to succeed!”
“But my Lord!” piped up Breymar, “Surely you will not leave me out!”
“Breymar, do you think that you are ready for a journey like this? You are young.” the Phoenix replied.
“I am fleet of foot, my Lord, although, unlike Mekilno, and I am a fierce fighter, although, Connax, I do not yet posses your strength. I…I am not ready to go, my Lord… but I will try!”
The Phoenix laughed. “You have won me, Breymar. You shall go, and it is good that you think yourself unready for this task. And you, Baltimir, it is good that you also think yourself unable to carry out this perilous journey. For if you had thought yourselves ready and able, it would have been proof that you were not. And so we have six.”
“When should we leave, my Lord?” Baltimir asked.
“Tonight, when the moon has reached her highest point.”
The moonlight filtered down through the trees, illuminating the two pillars of stone where the creatures had gathered. A whispered conversation between two of them was taking place.
“Sire, I am ready to embark upon this task, and so are the others. But how are we to get to Mount Grimore, and in which direction are we to start?” A young boy’s voice asked.
“Mount Grimore lies in the Ancient Lands, the Lands of Lore. Many things await unwary travellers there, and so you will need help. Your small band may not be enough, yet it is all that I can give you. I therefore counsel you to head towards the Lake that lies East of the Sun, and West of the Moon, in the marshes that lie over the river, and seek out the Warden that lives there. He will point you in the right direction, and perhaps he may even enlarge your band.” The Phoenix replied.
And so it was, with the moonlight giving the path and the trees a silver glow the six set off. Baltimir and Stormrider in front, walking side by side, and behind them, Mekilno, Connax and Breymar walked, with Silver bringing up the rear.
The night passed uneventfully, and they were in high spirits, and chatted gaily to each other for most of the night. Jokes were shared, stories were told, and the sound of laughter was heard well into the night. (Except for Connax, who moaned that his feet were hurting, the food was horrible and there was not enough of it, and that he should never have agreed to come, and that Orcs would kill them all before dawn!)
“Typical!” muttered Mekilno to Stormrider, when Connax moaned about his feet for the sixtieth time, and Stormrider let out a hearty laugh. Soon Connax was the butt of a lot of jokes. (Told so that he couldn’t hear of course, and anyway, he was enjoying moaning so much that he didn’t care what they were saying!)
Soon the travellers became weary, and so they made camp, and lay down to rest, always with a sentry on guard, because it was likely that there were Orcs in those woods.
They woke just as the sun was beginning to rise. As they walked further on, they noticed the trees, which had been crowded together, were starting to thin out around them. Suddenly a shout went up from Mekilno, whose Elven eyes were the keenest of all.
“Quick! Over here! Look at this!” Mekilno’s quick eyes had spotted something etched onto a tree trunk.

Aragorn's Latest Lay
March 4th,2003, 11:27 AM
Love that this doesn't take itself too seriously but never descends into farce.

You are keeping the story going nicely whilst showing us interesting bits about each character.

love it!
A.L.L.

Aragorn's Latest Lay
March 4th,2003, 11:30 AM
p.s. pleeeeeeeeeaaaaase tell everyone you know that the new fanfic area is open and that they can post there once registered. There are some great benefits but even the ones who have registered so far have failed to post stories there (except a couple of us).

Just bring your story over there and post it all and put a link in this thread to the new part of the site, like I did in LOTS.

We need to get more people interested so make it your mission.

Thank you for your patience.

A.L.L.

Elfdaughter
March 4th,2003, 01:57 PM
Chapter Three
A Comfortable Bed

“What does it mean, Mekilno?” asked Breymar.
“We are in Elf territory.” He replied. “These runes mark the borders of their land.”
“Woodland Elves?”
“No, the runes on this tree are the writing of the Lakeland Elves. We must be nearing the Great River. These Elves may help us across.”
“MAY?” Connax cut in. “They only MIGHT help us?!”
“Peace, my friend of the Earth! The Lakeland Elves are not a warring folk, except in times of great need. Yet they are not one to help others to cross, unless they are of their own kind. As one of their kin is among this company, I think they will help us across. Bellaria! Tel nimroph!” Mekilno called. “They have sentries everywhere.” He whispered to the others. An answering call seemed to echo back across the woods. “Nimvariae! Nimvariae! Tel nimroph! Nimvariae!” A silver headed Elf jumped out of the undergrowth and greeted them. As with all Elves, he was tall and fair, and his eyes were as grey as the sea on a stormy day, but kind. He smiled at the company as he greeted them.
“Nimvariae, Brother. Where are you headed with such peculiar company? I have never seen a stranger gathering!”
“We make our way to the north, to the Ancient Lands. But first we must seek out the Warden of the Lake.” Mekilno replied.
“The Ancient Lands?” The Elf took a step back. “The place where none dare to tread? I know of only one reason to head towards that place. There is one among you, then, who is spoken of in the prophecy?” Baltimir took a hesitant step forward. The Elf nodded. “Then I will take you to the Warden, for the road is full of danger from here onwards. Come.” On the way to his ship, the Elf introduced himself. “Forgive me, my friends, for not introducing myself earlier. I am Arénath, Captain of the Elven ship ‘Oceana’. She will take us down the river Breth, until we reach the marshes. There is nowhere to moor there, and so we will have to continue down river until we reach the village of Finrieth. There we will rest, and then tackle the marshes. But first, rest and sleep, here in Nimroth. Numenor, and sleep well my friends.”
They were standing in a small copse of Tralorth trees, as the moon settled in the sky. The silver bark and leaves of the Night Tralorths glistened and danced as the wind blew through them. High up in the trees, out of the reach of Orcs and wild beasts, were the tree houses of the Elves, where they allowed their guests to sleep. The Lakeland Elves themselves slept in their ships and boats by the river.
Mekilno and Baltimir climbed up into one of the tree houses, but Connax stood under the tree and grumbled, once again.
“Rats and wreckage! You won’t get me up there!”
“Where will you sleep then, Connax? On the ground?” laughed Mekilno.
“Certainly not! Orcs and wild beasts creep around at night down here!” Connax called back.
“So where will you sleep then Connax, if you will not sleep under the tree, or in it? Will you sleep in mid air?” Baltimir joked.
“All I’m saying is that I’m a Dwarf, and Dwarves do not sleep in trees!”
“Well this one does!” cried Mekilno, as he reached down from a lower branch and pulled Connax into the air. Before he could say “soup and celery” Connax was tossed into the tree house and pinned down by Baltimir. There were beds ready made in the tree house, and Connax was tucked into one of these so tightly that he could not move!
Mekilno and Baltimir climbed into their beds, laughing, and settled down to sleep. All three of them quickly fell under the spell that any comfortable bed can cast on a weary traveller after a long night’s hike.
Silver, Stormrider and Breymar lay under the tree and talked.
“He will have to leave us as we reach the Ancient Lands and Walír’s cave.” Silver remarked.
“He has much to learn before then – and we have much to do and far to travel. He has time to prove his worth.” Stormrider replied. “Yet you seem to be unusually quiet Silver, and you also Breymar.”
“We were thinking,” said Breymar, “what if he is not the one the prophecy spoke of? What if we were wrong?”
“He is the one.” The prophet quietly replied. “The stars foretell it. The hour has struck.”
“Perhaps it is the time,” declared Silver, “but what if we have chosen incorrectly – or…or what if the stars were wrong?” he added carefully. No creature ever dared to doubt the judgement of the prophets, and certainly not the Gods who governed the stars. Offending a prophet or a stargazer was to offend a messenger of the Gods, and therefore offend the Gods themselves. However, Stormrider knew that Silver was a kind and caring creature, as were all Unicorns, and that he only wanted the best for every creature that dwelt on the land, in the sea, and in the air.
“Are you afraid, Silver?” Stormrider asked.
“Nay, Stormrider – but if this task goes astray… our lives wouldn’t be worth a toss of my mane. Stormrider, when I think of those poor beasts in captivity in the Dark Lord’s castle…my horn tingles with the feeling of battle.” He shook his head slowly, his horn glinting in the moonlight. “Yet I know that we are the last of our kinds, Stormrider, and it would be foolhardy to waste our lives in that way. Breymar has told me what the Wolf spies have seen.”

Elfdaughter
March 5th,2003, 01:31 PM
OK, just to let you lot know, from now on, I'll be posting up in the new fanfic section at www.warofthering.net/fanfic (http://www.warofthering.net/fanfic) . Please feel free to keep comenting in this thread. Thanks!

Aragorn's Latest Lay
March 5th,2003, 02:09 PM
That's my girl!

Elfdaughter
March 5th,2003, 09:08 PM
lol